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Hey, I wrote reviews for both of them. One turned out being longer than the other. I'm sure we can just put ours together and give them that. And if we have anything left to finish up we can quickly do it in class before we get together as a group.

Andrew Somers

Chris Weidenbacher

Individual Project Essay Peer-Review

Kyle’s group decided to work with the topic of violence in the media, and how that relates tour everyday life. Kyle took this topic and decided to use literature as a form of media to illustrate his point of view about the topic. Overall his analysis and insight into the subject matter was informative and presented in a clear and intriguing manner.

To start out, the essay had a gripping opening that gave me a taste of what the paper would discuss but also led me to want to figure out exactly what he was talking about. The use of very poignant word contributed to this effect and by the end of even the first sentence I got a feel for what Kyle was trying to say. Throughout the first paragraph I was given a clear understanding of the thesis of the essay and how Kyle would approach his topic throughout the essay, he also makes some claims that antagonize the reader to continue to discover where these claims originate.

Kyle takes a few moments to clarify some aspects concerning his thesis and ask some very pressing questions. Then he dives directly into support for his claims, using the topic of literature as a source of media Kyle gives examples from historic literature to buttress his arguments and help develop his claims.

Kyle first decides to set up the scenario that literature has been equally if not more violent than other forms of media, yet they receive little blame in comparison to video games or movies. He explains some significantly violent literatures that are considered classics and asks why no such phenomenon of violence occurred when these were released. He asks if the story lines of books like these were released as films in contemporary society if they would be given the same judgment as they are today.

Kyle moves on to make some very interesting claims about where to distinguish between legitimate use of violence in the media and illegitimate. He uses the example of Shakespeare, saying that while Shakespeare’s tragedies may have been very violent forms of literature they are still considered some of the best stories. This is because Shakespeare focuses on the characters and creates a humanity for them so people actually feel emotionally connected to them when they die. Even the pieces of literature themselves make a commentary on the topic, because Shakespeare and Dickens use violence to actually try to point to a reasonable source, rather that critics of media violence who blame secondary sources.

Overall Kyle’s paper is successful at conveying its message in a clean cohesive and direct commentary on the topic. The use of both historical and contemporary examples to convey the message are also useful in giving a better comparison of how this issue relates. He takes a clear stance and supports his claims with evidence, although there are a few discrepancies and fallacies within the piece, on the whole the essay conveys its message powerfully.

haha sunday night indeed. so i thought the easiest way to do this would be if we each wrote a response paper to an essay then posted them and edited eachother's, then we have input on both and equal amounts of work. it's late so i'm going to try to finish tonight but if not i'll post it on here probably tomorrow afternoon. i'll take kyle's paper if you don't care

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